Old Age--A Haiku
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Retired from career,
Time does not appear to fly.
What do I perform?
Bones are delicate,
Sight becomes debilitate,
Mass getting fragile.
Consort left abode,
Feel rejected, neglected
How will I exist?
Life HAD energy,
Living WAS high-spirited,
Vivacious and brisk.
Sitting all alone,
Waiting for someone to knock,
Until lungs breathe last.
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Great haiku...sad though as we look forward to old age..
Very nice Haiku depicting aging but sad that he may do it alone. Hopefully he will not and someone will reach out a hand.
Thank you Debby
Susan
Sunnie
for your kind words of encouragement.
Sunnie, this hub was inspired after reading your hub titled, "Burt & Birdie" where you talk about the old couple. It sure was a funny hub but, made me ponder over old age :)
If age could be our only worry, wouldn't that be something? Excellent work, makes me think; voted up.
Well said jonmcclusk. We give so much importance to life and it's problems at young age that little do we realize that old age with body so fragile, our problems will more :(
Thanks for such a valuable feedback.
Appreciate you stopping by!
Will drop by your profile to pay a visit to your hubs...cheers!
Hi Ruchira, very nice haiku, so sad that he was facing old age on his own...
Voting up and thank you for sharing, best wishes Lesley
Beautiful and pulled at my heart strings--Thank you!
Oh wow. That was beautiful. I'm glad I still keep in touch or stop by loved ones places. It really sums up what some go through entering older age.
Hi Lesley,
I am glad that you liked the above. Yes, it sure is sad to be spending old age alone :(
Hi Audrey,
Thank you for your kind words. Wishing you joy, Always!
Hi Rachel,
Thank you for your support. I am glad you are considerate of our senior citizens :) Thanks for stopping by!
Voted up and awesome although it's sad. There should be someone knocking on his door very soon to help him.
I hope so too Writer20.
Thanks for the read, stop and comment :)
Ruchira you do this so well :)
this is a great haiku for old age, old age is inevitable for all of us...
I'm enjoying my youth at the moment. LOL
Your haiku are lovely.
Cheers
Thank you Frank
Raciniwa
Vinaya
Appreciate you all stopping by to read and comment.
I love this Ruchira, a perfect haiku concerning old age..My philosophy, You have two choices..Age or die young..Cheers
well said, ruby.
Old age is another BIG problem which I foresee :(
thanks for your wonderful feedback ;-)
What a great haiku... the way you described it... not sure I am looking forward to it ;)
Hi Stacy,
Such a pleasure to see ya :)
yes, I agree I did not portray a good picture of this old man :( but, old age is a very depressing scenario with fragile body and with this recession dunno how our 401K/pension plans will materialize when "we" retire....lol
thanks for your feedback...appreciate it.
Why do I feel old now? I know! Because your haiku was awesome and I felt your words. I'll bounce back soon:))
hahaha...you can never be old linda. With your contagious sense of humor :)
I am glad you enjoyed it, though! Thank you!
Another great Haiku from Ruchira. You seem to have been Haikud of late. These lovely, meaningful and syllable perfect haiku keep tumbling out of your haiku factory. Great Ruchira your emotional feel is awesome and you have captured the essence perfectly.
Manoj
P.S:- Reading your work is always a pleasure.
Hello Manoj,
Thank you the appreciation and always feel delighted to get praised by a prolific writer like you!
Thank you!!
Lovely Haiku
People who have retired,
should engage in a hobby.
There life has not expired.
They can find ways to keep happy. :)
Hello Lady_E,
I agree. Idle mind is bad for one's health. Old age and retired, one should venture out to do something so keep oneself busy.
Thanks for the vote of confidence. appreciated it!
sad.poignant.true.awesome
thanks Justin :)
you're welcome!
love your Haiku. but sadly it makes me realize how old I am and I am getting so close..lol
love your poem
debbie
Hi Debbie,
Thanks for stopping by :)
So what you are old, you are still kicking it :) Cheers!
This is a wake up call that our mortal life is indeed limited and that time flies until we (assuming we live that long) get old and fragile and decrepid. We can only hope that we have loved ones to attend to us when we get old just as loved ones attended to us when we were young and helpless. That is the ideal until we exit this life to enter the eternal one ahead. Voted up and useful...for indeed it is useful for people who have not been thinking ahead. For the future lies ahead!
beautifully expressed dear PEggy. What more can I say...you covered all the arenas, my friend.
Thank you for your priceless comment...cheers!
Relating more and more to this haiku as I get older. Voting this Up and Beautiful.
haha...no way Alocsin.
You are way to young to be old, my friend!
your profound hubs are such a treasure and speak volumes of your intelligence.
Cheers!
Debby Bruck Level 7 Commenter 4 months ago
Ruchira ~ Fun with haiku here showing the passage of time and human changes to physical and emotional. Very nice voting up. Blessings, Debby